tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7564505438332425192.post9205540619182446272..comments2023-04-27T08:16:15.885-07:00Comments on Wasted Productions: ArgumentJonathan Martinhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14841202262555830312noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7564505438332425192.post-24987158074246307292010-09-08T14:50:09.980-07:002010-09-08T14:50:09.980-07:00Wow, cutting off an ear. Crazy thing is, if teena...Wow, cutting off an ear. Crazy thing is, if teenagers could do that they WOULD! Or any other extremity. I didn't see it before the edits JA suggested but I like it after them, and I'm going to be thanking my stars when my little one just wants a nose ring!alphabetehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17305229870777987796noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7564505438332425192.post-89295737379886121662010-09-02T14:52:30.804-07:002010-09-02T14:52:30.804-07:00I see what you are saying about both of those. Th...I see what you are saying about both of those. Thanks for the feedback and I have made the adjustments.Jonathan Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14841202262555830312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7564505438332425192.post-17418447987217635802010-09-02T13:56:54.902-07:002010-09-02T13:56:54.902-07:00Oh, that is awesome. I love that Herbert knows he&...Oh, that is awesome. I love that Herbert knows he's being irrational and can't help himself. This was about my dad's reaction to finding out my sister was <i>thinking</i> of a tattoo (thank god I got mine without telling him!).<br /><br />Two little edits: <i>Seriously, you think this is not calm?</i> This seems a little stilted (considering the very natural flow of the rest), it could be cut to 'This <i>is</i> calm.'<br /><br />And this is a weird turn of phrase: <i>Didn’t think this too far through obviously, did you?</i> Obviously could be cut or moved to the beginning of the sentence.<br /><br />Now I'm going to have a horrifying dream about what my friends in college would have cut off if humans could grow extremities back. ;)J. A. Platthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03579737369756389484noreply@blogger.com