tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7564505438332425192.post5468053553692056987..comments2023-04-27T08:16:15.885-07:00Comments on Wasted Productions: Two's a CrowdJonathan Martinhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14841202262555830312noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7564505438332425192.post-40311667554904673572010-09-24T12:44:11.009-07:002010-09-24T12:44:11.009-07:00They may show up every now and then. I have a &qu...They may show up every now and then. I have a "Boss Checks in" style story in mind...I agree on the two sentences, i will look at the second sentence too.Jonathan Martinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14841202262555830312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7564505438332425192.post-1362144938750441722010-09-24T11:57:55.091-07:002010-09-24T11:57:55.091-07:00Oh man, I'm going to call it the Cock of Write...Oh man, I'm going to call it the <i>Cock of Writer’s Block</i> forever now! That's great. <br /><br />This: <i>He read my mind again, a talent he seemed to only employ when I was not happy with him, which was coming more and more frequently.</i> could be two sentences. And 'not happy' doesn't seem to do justice to the MC's irritation. Maybe something like, 'He'd read my mind again. He only seemed to do it when I was angry with him, which was happening more and more frequently.'<br /><br /><i>Cruel Mistress of Writer's Block</i> is pretty awesome too. I hope Carl and Steve make it into more stories.J. A. Platthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03579737369756389484noreply@blogger.com